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 Comments for 'A John Before Halo: Part 10'		  | 
	 
 
  
	
		
			J-117  
12:11 am | October 9, 2003 
			part 11 is out
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			Alpha Lance  
10:06 pm | October 4, 2003 
			Poop is a spamer.
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			J-117  
8:53 pm | October 4, 2003 
			m'kay then thx
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			Mainevent  
5:58 pm | October 4, 2003 
			I don't give ratings.
  So you basically pass or fail.
  Pass: Believable mostly well written story.
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			J-117  
4:03 pm | October 4, 2003 
			I pass, what do u mean by that mainevent? and poop what in god are u trying to say?
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			J-117  
11:42 am | October 4, 2003 
			thx and sure ill try but 750 words in long g\\for me lol.
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			Mainevent  
3:23 am | October 4, 2003 
			True, alright, you pass.  Good job.
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			J-117  
3:21 am | October 4, 2003 
			advanced humvees it was the only thing i could think of, cuz it is still to far back for the great ol hog to premiere.
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			Mainevent  
1:46 am | October 4, 2003 
			Try to spellcheck, it's not that bad, but still noticeable.  
  Give a little more depth to your characters, and their history.
  Otherwise, great story.
 
  BTW: THey have Humvees in the future?
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			Yo Yo (Kaboose)  
12:59 am | October 4, 2003 
			That was amazing...keep up the good work man...
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			Alpha Lance  
7:59 pm | October 3, 2003 
			Oh yeah! Great story J man. I notice that I was in there, and also Rambo. Also, good character description, and honestly, I just can't wait to what would happen on the next one. 
  P.S. Make part 11 a really long part.
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