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Comments for 'The Battle For Earth (Chapter Three)' |
MC's Cousin
7:12 pm | June 18, 2004
Well, it was a little confusing. I don't think you need a space between every paragraph, either.
You had a few misused words and grammar issues. Just look over the story real well next time.
And I would suggest bringing out more story. It really gets readers into the story more. I say this because it seemed to go by a little too fast. More details, all kinds, would do the story good too.
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MCC
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