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 Comments for 'Chapter Two of Halo:Armageddon'		  | 
	 
 
  
	
		
			IAmDelta  
4:07 am | February 19, 2004 
			MCC steals my words yet again.  As he said, this really didn't flow at all, and there was no perceptible plot.  I'm not sure how to help you...  Just read a lot of books and notice that your writing is not like them.  Then try to improve.  Good luck.
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			Alpha Lance  
10:54 pm | February 16, 2004 
			Your story format looks wierd, and I agree with MCC there. Not good at all.
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			MC's Cousin  
10:43 pm | February 16, 2004 
			Well simply put your writing is off.  You like to do short little sections that go by WAY to fast and end in purposelessness.  Not good.
  Signing Off
 
  MCC
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